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Comment from equestrik
This is a clever write with a very cute picture of Fergus. I like that your love of your dog is well depicted in your poem. All the best to you in the upcoming contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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This is a clever write with a very cute picture of Fergus. I like that your love of your dog is well depicted in your poem. All the best to you in the upcoming contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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thank you!
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Our pets can be the greatest gift in life. I love how you pay homage to this guy with such humor and spirit. He looks like quite a character! Love the photo and expression!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Our pets can be the greatest gift in life. I love how you pay homage to this guy with such humor and spirit. He looks like quite a character! Love the photo and expression!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Thanks and a smile back at you!
Comment from Wendy G
Poor Fergus. I think he looks quite lovely! Your epitaph is well written, and humorous, and the photo is beautiful! I send you best wishes for the epitaph contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Poor Fergus. I think he looks quite lovely! Your epitaph is well written, and humorous, and the photo is beautiful! I send you best wishes for the epitaph contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Wendy, thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was unexpected! I have not read an epitaph in this contest for an animal. That sets your entry apart and in a different creative corner. Nice!
I liked that you offered some rhyming here - but the following line sounded a bit 'off' to my ear because there was no end rhyme to match it.
Perhaps consider:
He had flapping ears that flipped around
--> He had flapping ears that flipped (and turned)
--> for a near rhyme/ slant-rhyme
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was unexpected! I have not read an epitaph in this contest for an animal. That sets your entry apart and in a different creative corner. Nice!
I liked that you offered some rhyming here - but the following line sounded a bit 'off' to my ear because there was no end rhyme to match it.
Perhaps consider:
He had flapping ears that flipped around
--> He had flapping ears that flipped (and turned)
--> for a near rhyme/ slant-rhyme
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Robyn, good thought thank you.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh, man, poor Ferguson died but will always be remembered"|e had flapping ears that flipped around
whenever he had the gumption to run,
usually when he heard a repeat of a gun
Fergus was my boy. Man, we had fun!|. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Oh, man, poor Ferguson died but will always be remembered"|e had flapping ears that flipped around
whenever he had the gumption to run,
usually when he heard a repeat of a gun
Fergus was my boy. Man, we had fun!|. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Iza, thank you
Comment from lyenochka
What a funny face! And yet the poem makes us appreciate this humorous-looking canine and his loyalty was deep and apparently, he used his snout and ears to help his human. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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What a funny face! And yet the poem makes us appreciate this humorous-looking canine and his loyalty was deep and apparently, he used his snout and ears to help his human. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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lyenochka, thank you
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Witty bit of whimsy in fine form--bonus rhymes!--clever wordplay--alliteration--mangy/mutt--flapping/flipping. The pic is priceless--I should have used it for my piece that referred to a pug. This may be a winner.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Witty bit of whimsy in fine form--bonus rhymes!--clever wordplay--alliteration--mangy/mutt--flapping/flipping. The pic is priceless--I should have used it for my piece that referred to a pug. This may be a winner.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Elizabeth, thank you.
Comment from Leann DS
Poor little pup! We have a funny looking dog, part lab and part basset hound. Everyone makes fun of his little ducky legs, but we adore him. Cute entry for the contest. Hugs. And good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Poor little pup! We have a funny looking dog, part lab and part basset hound. Everyone makes fun of his little ducky legs, but we adore him. Cute entry for the contest. Hugs. And good luck!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Smiling back.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, it's sad when we lose a pet, especially one that meant so much. This is a lovely contest entry, and that photo! LOL, that poor dog. But he's so cute. Well done, this is a lovely contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Aww, it's sad when we lose a pet, especially one that meant so much. This is a lovely contest entry, and that photo! LOL, that poor dog. But he's so cute. Well done, this is a lovely contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from zanya
Isn't it just wonderful what our precious canines offer us humans - even one that is 'As mangy a mutt that ever walked the earth'- and a super pic to illustrate
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Isn't it just wonderful what our precious canines offer us humans - even one that is 'As mangy a mutt that ever walked the earth'- and a super pic to illustrate
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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thank you I appreciate your review and comments.