Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Football Chapter 8 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Ben B.
I knew a teacher's life can be rough, but damn. So this Frost guy is a potential criminal? Also, it seemed like Mr. Edwards was not very interested in the conversation if he left right on the dot the moment he could. Not a fan of him either.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I knew a teacher's life can be rough, but damn. So this Frost guy is a potential criminal? Also, it seemed like Mr. Edwards was not very interested in the conversation if he left right on the dot the moment he could. Not a fan of him either.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Hmm, very interesting take. Thank you for you're thoughts.
Comment from Wendy G
I am looking forward to the continuation of this story, as it is interesting and well-written. The notes at the start are helpful, as are the character descriptions at the end.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I am looking forward to the continuation of this story, as it is interesting and well-written. The notes at the start are helpful, as are the character descriptions at the end.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Well it seems like Gabriel is starting to break down the emotional barriers. The "click" he heard when they jogged ... Hmmmmm, could it be a camera?
A few things:
Gabriel glanced at this watch. [... glanced at HIS ? watch.]
He chewed his lower lip. [I think I mentioned this before, but I'm not sure. I've noticed, though that you use this, or a variant as a stock phrase when someone is worried or troubled. Nothing major.]
Each teacher studied their schedule. [Does it trouble you as much as it does me to use the plural "they" with the singular "each"? It's becoming acceptable, but I choose to alter one of them. In this case, say "The teachers studied their schedule."]
and wrote the first weeks objectives for each subject [... the first WEEK'S objectives ....]
Tell the coach and Katherine I'll see 'em next Sunday.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Well it seems like Gabriel is starting to break down the emotional barriers. The "click" he heard when they jogged ... Hmmmmm, could it be a camera?
A few things:
Gabriel glanced at this watch. [... glanced at HIS ? watch.]
He chewed his lower lip. [I think I mentioned this before, but I'm not sure. I've noticed, though that you use this, or a variant as a stock phrase when someone is worried or troubled. Nothing major.]
Each teacher studied their schedule. [Does it trouble you as much as it does me to use the plural "they" with the singular "each"? It's becoming acceptable, but I choose to alter one of them. In this case, say "The teachers studied their schedule."]
and wrote the first weeks objectives for each subject [... the first WEEK'S objectives ....]
Tell the coach and Katherine I'll see 'em next Sunday.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Gabe and Katherine will be happy to see you next Sunday. LOL I appreciated the editing assistance. I can't believe I made some of those errors but did and now they're fixed.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good day or evening Barb
smiles, as usual from me about you giving us readers to read a well written chapter, which keeps me wanting to read more of your story about Katherine and her four sons;
I believe GREAT is a good way to say how I feel about your chacters and the way you have kept my interest.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Good day or evening Barb
smiles, as usual from me about you giving us readers to read a well written chapter, which keeps me wanting to read more of your story about Katherine and her four sons;
I believe GREAT is a good way to say how I feel about your chacters and the way you have kept my interest.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the kind words.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Nice job on some backstory and stage-setting in this chapter. I didn't see a single nit! I enjoyed the post and look forward to more action - I'm afraid it's coming....
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Barbara,
Nice job on some backstory and stage-setting in this chapter. I didn't see a single nit! I enjoyed the post and look forward to more action - I'm afraid it's coming....
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
I always enjoy your stories, with the strong, independent female antagonists, and strong, but sensitive male protagonists. And you always do well the mysterious, but dangerous antagonists. Katherine wonders how she's going to teach 5 classiest, when it reduces back to four. Well done, great post Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I always enjoy your stories, with the strong, independent female antagonists, and strong, but sensitive male protagonists. And you always do well the mysterious, but dangerous antagonists. Katherine wonders how she's going to teach 5 classiest, when it reduces back to four. Well done, great post Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. As an elementary teacher, who teachers all the subjects, I laugh at High School teachers. My son teaches one subject over and over again. He does HAVE To TWEET it for each individual class. Oh my!!!! Thank you.
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Yes, my wife was a high school faculty head. Teaching language head, teaching three subjects, my daughter is an elementary teacher.
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So you do understand.
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I do Barbara.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm anxious to find out what the sound is that the dogs here. It's a clicking sound but where is it coming from a where. It sound like classes will be starting soon. Gabriel seems like he is getting pretty interested in the lady math teacher.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I'm anxious to find out what the sound is that the dogs here. It's a clicking sound but where is it coming from a where. It sound like classes will be starting soon. Gabriel seems like he is getting pretty interested in the lady math teacher.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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He sure does. HMMM?? Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Four preparations still sounds like a lot, especially for someone just starting out. So the student population is growing. In the school district where I live, they've lost several students and are thinking of eliminating some elementary schools. I like the added interest with someone other than Frost causing concerns for Katherine. Someone seems to be watching, and has the dogs' attention. Gabriel needs to butt out of Katherine's business. He's getting too involved, and it could cause trouble. Things are difficult enough for a new teacher. His attentions will only fuel the rumors that Frost began. All the preparations for the school year sound so realistic. Great chapter. judi
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Four preparations still sounds like a lot, especially for someone just starting out. So the student population is growing. In the school district where I live, they've lost several students and are thinking of eliminating some elementary schools. I like the added interest with someone other than Frost causing concerns for Katherine. Someone seems to be watching, and has the dogs' attention. Gabriel needs to butt out of Katherine's business. He's getting too involved, and it could cause trouble. Things are difficult enough for a new teacher. His attentions will only fuel the rumors that Frost began. All the preparations for the school year sound so realistic. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. Katherine is certainly going to have a busy year. judi
Comment from Sankey
Another good read. Keeping the mystery alive as to the possible "snooper" or whatever. Now a few spags and suggestions. (")The Social Studies department
Not sure of the following? Department [l?](h?)eads please come and get them."
for [the] all the boys and Ms. Sarah."
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Another good read. Keeping the mystery alive as to the possible "snooper" or whatever. Now a few spags and suggestions. (")The Social Studies department
Not sure of the following? Department [l?](h?)eads please come and get them."
for [the] all the boys and Ms. Sarah."
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I will make the corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I like the dogs and I like Gabriel. But the dogs have me worried about the sound they keep hearing. What is it? Something or somebody is definitely out there. Now, what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Hi Barbara, I like the dogs and I like Gabriel. But the dogs have me worried about the sound they keep hearing. What is it? Something or somebody is definitely out there. Now, what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I'm not sure what next?? LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Hehe I know the feeling. You'll know soon enough. Ulla:)))